Fix examples gallery
IELTS Writing Fix Examples (Band 6 → Band 7)
Each example shows a before sentence, why it loses marks, and a Band 7 direction — then you can run the same type of fix on your own essay.
Before
Technology is very important in modern life.
Why it loses marks
Too general. It does not develop a clear argument.
Band 7 direction
Technology improves daily convenience, but excessive digital dependence can also make modern routines more stressful.
What changed
- clearer position
- more specific vocabulary
- stronger contrast
- less repetitive wording
Before
Firstly, phones are useful. Secondly, they help communication. Thirdly, they save time.
Why it loses marks
The paragraph lists points without developing one central idea.
Band 7 direction
Smartphones mainly help people coordinate daily tasks faster, although constant notifications can interrupt deep work.
What changed
- one developed idea
- logical progression
- qualifying clause
Before
This is a big problem for many people in society.
Why it loses marks
Vague words like big, many, and society do not show precise meaning.
Band 7 direction
Rising housing costs create financial pressure for young professionals in major cities.
What changed
- specific subject
- precise nouns
- concrete context