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Coherence & Cohesion Fix Examples
Replicate these paragraph-level coherence fixes on your own essay.
Before
Firstly, phones are useful. Secondly, they help communication. Thirdly, they save time.
Why it loses marks
The paragraph lists points without developing one central idea.
Band 7 direction
Smartphones mainly help people coordinate daily tasks faster, although constant notifications can interrupt deep work.
What changed
- one developed idea
- logical progression
- qualifying clause