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Coherence & Cohesion Fix Examples
Replicate these paragraph-level coherence fixes on your own essay.
改前
Firstly, phones are useful. Secondly, they help communication. Thirdly, they save time.
为什么丢分
The paragraph lists points without developing one central idea.
Band 7 改写方向
Smartphones mainly help people coordinate daily tasks faster, although constant notifications can interrupt deep work.
改了什么
- one developed idea
- logical progression
- qualifying clause