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Band 6 to Band 7 Essay Rewrite Examples
Use these replicable rewrite patterns to diagnose the same blocker in your own Task 2 essay.
Before
Technology is very important in modern life.
Why it loses marks
Too general. It does not develop a clear argument.
Band 7 direction
Technology improves daily convenience, but excessive digital dependence can also make modern routines more stressful.
What changed
- clearer position
- more specific vocabulary
- stronger contrast
- less repetitive wording
Before
Although technology develop quickly, but people still use it every day.
Why it loses marks
Double conjunction and subject–verb agreement break sentence control.
Band 7 direction
Although technology develops quickly, many people still rely on it for everyday communication.
What changed
- removed double conjunction
- agreement fixed
- clearer clause balance