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Band 6 to Band 7 Essay Rewrite Examples
Use these replicable rewrite patterns to diagnose the same blocker in your own Task 2 essay.
改前
Technology is very important in modern life.
为什么丢分
Too general. It does not develop a clear argument.
Band 7 改写方向
Technology improves daily convenience, but excessive digital dependence can also make modern routines more stressful.
改了什么
- clearer position
- more specific vocabulary
- stronger contrast
- less repetitive wording
改前
Although technology develop quickly, but people still use it every day.
为什么丢分
Double conjunction and subject–verb agreement break sentence control.
Band 7 改写方向
Although technology develops quickly, many people still rely on it for everyday communication.
改了什么
- removed double conjunction
- agreement fixed
- clearer clause balance